Date: 2012-11-14 08:32 pm (UTC)
I really like the first-person version of this much better than the third person and I'm not even sure I can articulate why. It's possible that it's because we're in Carter's head, who's the person that I can relate to more, but I'm not really sure that's the only reason. In any event, I liked reading this and felt I could settle into the story better with it in first person.

I don't often read other comments, but I did see someone mention the line about being the predator and the prey. I wanted to add some confusion into the mix (*g*) and say that I think it's definitely clear as written. As you said, the two phrases mirror each other (predator/prey, tiger/deer) and I didn't get confused there at all. Just my two cents. : )
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