The Vampire Diaries Fic: Fool For Love

[meridian_rose]

Title: Fool For Love
Fandom: The Vampire Diaries
Pairing/Characters: Katherine/Stefan, Katherine/Damon
Rating: PG-13
Word Count: 170
Prompt: For the writerverse hit mechallenge; I chose the prompt "Write a story about two brothers who are competing for the affection of the same woman."
Summary: Damon loves Katherine. Stefan loves Katherine. Katherine loves herself.
Warnings: None
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Stefan was a fool if he thought that he was the object of Katherine's affection. She'd explained to Damon how she needed to keep Stefan on her side. How he could never understand her like Damon did. How she couldn't tell Stefan the truth. How she had not yet given Stefan her blood as she had given it to Damon.

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Damon was a fool if he thought Katherine could ever love him. She was in love with Stefan, and nothing could change that. She adored him, and soon they would talk to Father about his marrying her. Stefan had never loved so deeply. She was his, and he was hers.

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The Salvatores were fools. She was a vampire living under the roof of a self proclaimed vampire hunter, and she had both of his sons wrapped around her little finger. Each brother thought she loved him best, each competed for her affections in subtle and not so subtle ways. It was almost tiresome, how easily they'd fallen for her charms.

Comments

[eternal-moonie.livejournal.com]

Absolutely AWESOME!!!

[meridian_rose]

Thank you :D It was a great prompt for TVD :D

[bonojonovi.livejournal.com]

I've never seen the show before, but reading this makes me more interested in giving it a try.

I like the parallel construction the best! "X was a fool" at the beginning of each paragraph, I mean. It gives the reader a nice rhythm and a motif to captivate their interest. I love love love that, and it's hard to make it work (I've never been able to, haha).

If I knew the characters and the show's plot better, I'd be able to offer a more helpful review. But as far as your writing goes, I think you did wonderfully. You portrayed the characters well and made them distinct; you presented a clear, unsolved problem between the three mentioned characters, and also provided a relationship dynamic; aaaand I think it was just well written! Good job! :)

[meridian_rose]

Thank you for such a great comment/review :D It's always lovely to hear that a story structure works.

I'm also always pleased if a reader with no knowledge of canon is able to enjoy a piece, that I've managed to make the characters and their dynamics accessible :D