Poem for writerverse

[meridian_rose]

Title: The Guest
Fandom: Original
Rating: PG-13
Word Count: 118
Prompt: For the writerverse Sonnet challenge
Summary: A sonnet in which one who may be a witch addresses a visitor to her domain
Warnings: None

I found this harder even than to write than the sestina; I have problems figuring out an iamb vs a trochee, so I hope it's right.

The Guest

Who dares the silence of the night disturb?
Who dares to knock my door, at this late hour?
Who dares my blissful slumber to perturb?
Who dares approach this proclaimed witch's tower?

A price there is, for favours asked of me
And coin might not be what I do demand
If stay you will, prepare to pay the fee
I will not ask for what you can't command

Yet none complain who pay to me my due
My name sits honeyed 'pon the tongue of they
Who think before they ask what I shall do;
A miser or a fool ought walk away

So which is it to be, my midnight guest?
Are you fearful, or merely unimpressed?

Comments

[hrhrionastar.livejournal.com]

Nice mix of fun and the chance of real magic :)

I like the last two lines especially - they made me smile :D

[meridian_rose]

Thank you :D This was a difficult challenge - the slightly crack-y aspect made it more bearable :D

[eternal-moonie.livejournal.com]

awesome poem!

[meridian_rose]

Thank you :D

[brontefanatic.livejournal.com]

Oh, this is very eerie. I really loved the 2nd stanza.

A price there is, for favours asked of me
And coin might not be what I do demand

And then as the poem continues, the sense of dread is lightened up through the last line -

Are you fearful, or merely unimpressed?

Great job!

[meridian_rose]

Thank you :D It was challenging but I had fun with the idea behind it; Riona's comment about the prose piece made me think about it and its relation to this - at least the witch here demonstrates emotion, being annoyed at being disturbed and her last tongue in cheek comment :D