Looked at the site - NICE! I'm intrigued by your WIPs. Very tasty. I think this needs a tiny bit of editing for clarity and more tempting. My thoughts in parantheses -
Learning later in life, slow-burn romance When her (who) sister Kerine offers to fulfil the dying wish of their local sorcerer and bring home his estranged sister Sabrina (why), seamstress Bryony agrees to stay with Emeri (who is this??) to keep him company. Despite her initial reluctance (why) Bryony is soon developing her latent magical powers under Emeri's tutelage – and, despite knowing heartbreak must lie ahead, falling in love.
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Looked at the site - NICE! I'm intrigued by your WIPs. Very tasty. I think this needs a tiny bit of editing for clarity and more tempting. My thoughts in parantheses -
Learning later in life, slow-burn romance
When her (who) sister Kerine offers to fulfil the dying wish of their local sorcerer and bring home his estranged sister Sabrina (why), seamstress Bryony agrees to stay with Emeri (who is this??) to keep him company. Despite her initial reluctance (why) Bryony is soon developing her latent magical powers under Emeri's tutelage – and, despite knowing heartbreak must lie ahead, falling in love.