http://dorothydeath.livejournal.com/ ([identity profile] dorothydeath.livejournal.com) wrote in [personal profile] meridian_rose 2014-03-31 03:00 pm (UTC)

Ooh, a fortune teller's POV! Nice! :D I enjoy looking at Kat through different people. :D

Still, her clothing usually satisfied customers who expected a certain style.
Love this line! :D

who showed no sign of being either impressed or sceptical.
Love this! :D

could she could reign as queen
I believe there's one extra 'could'. O_O Sorry. A habit. :D

an insubstantial affair that would not last the week
Love Cal! :D

If she'd hoped to be shocking, she would be disappointed. The matchmaker merely shrugged.
I'm enjoying her POV a lot! :D

Scrying rather than reading the cards would be most suitable in this situation.
This gives me Shota feels. :D

There were images, sounds, colours, and beyond these an instinctual knowing, like a waking dream.
Awesome description! :D

and so as always she almost always
This feels a bit awkward. O_o

and there are maybe two who will be more than brief dalliances, who could be part of your life if you choose
I'm curious who they are. :D Is MacBride one of them? :D

Monogamy would not suit me anyway
Love this about Kat! :D

Was it better to have known love only to lose it, as Catriona had, or better to never feel the sting of loss?
Oh, yes, that's always an open question. :D

Cal was sprawled on the grass, reading
I love that he's reading while he waits. :D Very Cal of him! :D

Cal began listing inappropriate suitors
LOLOLOL :D

he'd be grubbing for insects in the woods if he weren't friends with her.
LOL, love this line! :D

she tuned him out, dwelling on the long, lonely, road ahead.
That's a lovely story, bb! :D And wonderfully written! :D
And though I enjoyed this style a lot I think I prefer your usual one. This style is very well suited for a short story but for a novel I think your usual one works better! :D
If you don't mind me saying so. O_O

Anyway. It's a very interesting piece! You did a great job, bb! :D
*FLAILS*

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