This is strong, very naturally-feeling writing. You say it's not your usual, and yet it flows so well and feels so comfortable that surely it must not have been uncomfortable to write? I particularly like that your omniscient POV seems to be centered on the female characters - this is really nice and feels unusual enough to notice. Not sure if it's intentional with this smaller excerpt, but it works wonderfully here.

There's something of a mystery to this piece - can she really NOT have a soul mate in all of the world? Are we to trust the matchmaker and her aura-reading gift? What is making the Queen feel so torn about this desire?

It's great that you've got this reader compelled and asking questions! I also, very much like the idea of "hawk".