http://brontefanatic.livejournal.com/ ([identity profile] brontefanatic.livejournal.com) wrote in [personal profile] meridian_rose 2012-05-27 09:25 pm (UTC)

This was deliciously creepy - the contrast between the beginning, when your central character sees himself as some type of amateur detective, to the mysterious final line.

His horror at disobeying her said a lot about how dangerous she actually was. Then the idea of staying there and drinking tea with her made it even worse.

I like that you didn't actually reveal her secret.

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